Not a great choice of track to remix in general.
It's gonna take more than that to make Kylie Minogue bearable.
The snare on the intro needs EQing to be sharper and cut through the wall of sound better.
The synth used on the intro and in various places throughout is quite a bad noise in general, too electronic without any noticeable texture.
There are large sections where the song is the exact same for more than 20-30 seconds, he should add break-beats and quiet sections for atmosphere.
The voice cuts on the buildup are a little rushed, they should keep in time with the snares.
I like the upwards chime-like arpeggio, that alone has a bit of potential.
Good effort. 5/10.
Constructive criticism may seem harsh but every aspiring producer needs it.
~Benzie