Al Pacino Posted February 11, 2014 Share Posted February 11, 2014 Just something I wrote. Put together pretty fast (like 5-10min lol). But I used to write alot when I was depressed, and felt like writing today for the first time in awhile. Anyways, what do you think? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mustard Posted February 11, 2014 Share Posted February 11, 2014 I'd add some more commas to be honest. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wowggbad Posted February 11, 2014 Share Posted February 11, 2014 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Al Pacino Posted February 11, 2014 Author Share Posted February 11, 2014 I'd add some more commas to be honest. Okay that's just a grammar issue though. Feedback nonetheless,thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mustard Posted February 11, 2014 Share Posted February 11, 2014 Okay that's just a grammar issue though. Feedback nonetheless,thanks. Well, no offence, but it looks like its been written by an edgy, angsty teenager. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nezz Posted February 11, 2014 Share Posted February 11, 2014 Well, no offence, but it looks like its been written by an edgy, angsty teenager. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
